Transgressions 1-3

Onissarle · Post by **Onissarle** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 11:31 am

Well someone keeps rabbiting on about Jack fan-comics so after I finished drawing some Pepe and Karma semi-porn I bought a new Pilot Shaker (this one's red, cuz red wunz go fasta) and sketched the first few pages of my own. So without any more pointless babble, here are the rough pencil sketches for the first three pages of transgressions, mostly just introductory stuff... (about 300k each)

http://www.furnation.com/onissarle/azp1j.jpg
http://www.furnation.com/onissarle/azp2j.jpg
http://www.furnation.com/onissarle/azp3j.jpg

As you can tell, only the first frame is vaguely finished, the rest is still very rough sketch work. I had to draw the text boxes on a 'best guess' basis, I did pretty well in that respect.

As for continuing with it... well that depends on if David gives me permission to use the characters or not. So David, if you're reading this thread, is it alright for me to do a non-cannon story as fan-art?

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Surtur · Post by **Surtur** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 11:46 am

Jack + Hardboiled Detective fic + Noir = Good

Transgressions is full of the good. I commend you. I would be full of the happy if you did more.

Michael Ezaiany · Post by **Michael Ezaiany** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 12:06 pm

Oni, you're a damn good artist and comic creator and... blah blah blah... great work!

Striker · Post by **Striker** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 12:30 pm

VERY good stuff. Rather close in theme to the stories I'm writing, but far better done.

El SillY · Post by **El SillY** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 12:32 pm

Hey! Jack is getting a blow job in the last panel! hrm, back to reality, great job! MOOOOOORRRREEEE! please? *puppy eyes*

Onissarle · Post by **Onissarle** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 12:35 pm

On 2002-04-17 13:32, El SillY wrote:
Hey! Jack is getting a blow job in the last panel! hrm, back to reality, great job! MOOOOOORRRREEEE! please? *puppy eyes*

I'd think you were some sort of seriously sickening pervert... if I hadn't made the same joke to a friend while drawing it.

As for more, well like I said, up to Dave. Though I'm idly sketching out the fourth page while sat at my computer now. So by the time I get a reply from him, I might have the rough pencils down.

Paul_Pinewood · Post by **Paul_Pinewood** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 12:38 pm

Yay! More gloomy animals in the rain,
And they aren't singing, I quess

Seriously: Great work. I like it.

Onissarle · Post by **Onissarle** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 1:03 pm

Singing? You want singing?

*makes one of the characters on the fourth page sing*

Onissarle · Post by **Onissarle** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 1:51 pm

Well the fourth page is now as finished as the first three are and has been uploaded, ready to display.

*ponders starting the fifth*

Mikaiten · Post by **Mikaiten** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 1:56 pm

Wow, that was amazing. I loved it.

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Max Damage · Post by **Max Damage** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 2:17 pm

I love page 4 - I mean, comics are supposed to be sequential art, right? That was a non-sequitir of the first degree.

Never underestimate the comedic potential of randomness.

Onissarle · Post by **Onissarle** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 2:40 pm

Hey! Don't make me slap you!

You're not meant to be reading page four until I get David's permission to post more publically. Oh well, it's done now so I might as well post the fourth page publically and leave it at that until he gets back to me...

http://www.furnation.com/onissarle/azp4j.jpg

CatGuyEz8 · Post by **CatGuyEz8** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 3:46 pm

fanr loves his flaming swords! by the way awsome art work and story

Onissarle · Post by **Onissarle** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 4:19 pm

I've made a few minor changes to page four so that it's more obvious how it's meant to be read.

ZOMBIE USER 6344 · Post by **ZOMBIE USER 6344** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 9:14 pm

Great comic Onissarle! Now you have begun, and you HAVE to finish it! Or I will.. um.. write something nasty on the forum! ^^

Keep it up bud!

Garoshy · Post by **Garoshy** » Wed Apr 17, 2002 11:10 pm

YEES... now you have to finish it or I will haunt you FOREVER, (or something like that...)

Onissarle · Post by **Onissarle** » Thu Apr 18, 2002 5:02 am

I'm only going to say this once more, I'm not going to post any more, even if I draw it, until David posts permission.

DavidHopkins · Post by **DavidHopkins** » Thu Apr 18, 2002 7:20 am

Oh christ, you don't need my permision, I'm not your mommy

I know a lot of artists are over protective but I'm not. Just don't you be making money without giving me my fair share

Striker · Post by **Striker** » Thu Apr 18, 2002 7:22 am

Can I take that as a generalized permission to use your characters or is it just Onissarle?

Because I'd like to finish that little Farrago story I'm writing...

DJ Pirtu · Post by **DJ Pirtu** » Thu Apr 18, 2002 8:21 am

Not bad. Not bad at all.
I especialy liked the third page. It's probably the best intoduction of Jack I've heard so far.