Random Panel from latest comic drawn

ChaosBurnFlame · Post by **ChaosBurnFlame** » Mon Oct 15, 2007 7:15 pm

This is something that I thought would look cool, but something doesn't seem quite right with the finished panel.

Some critiques please?

Kaloo · Post by **Kaloo** » Mon Oct 15, 2007 7:35 pm

The wall is too flat, around where the monster hit it. And I think the person's arms seem a little bit long.

Black Sparrow · Post by **Black Sparrow** » Mon Oct 15, 2007 8:04 pm

The thing that stands out to me is that the monster's shoulders don't seem to follow the line of movement of its arm. The left shoulder should be coming forward a bit, since its arm is coming forward. Otherwise, I suspect it would pull a muscle trying to do that.

Caybo · Post by **Caybo** » Mon Oct 15, 2007 9:16 pm

The person ducking seems to have legs that are too long, or a smaller upper body, as the foreshortening seems a bit over-exaggerated to my eyes. Beyond that pretty simple fix, I think the wall needs a better impact effect where the fist hits, as someone else mentioned.

CodeGuy · Post by **CodeGuy** » Sat Nov 03, 2007 12:41 am

The speed lines over the guy's head made me feel like he wasn't directly under the arm. To me it looks like they're in front of the arm, so his head is too and he doesn't really need to duck.

Drugsmugglingcartoonist · Sun Nov 18, 2007 8:06 am

The guy's pose is dynamic and the monster's is static., make him lean a little. The composition and design is nice though.