My comic? What do you think?

Cactrot · Post by **Cactrot** » Sun Jul 02, 2006 1:39 pm

Hey, what do you guys and gals think:

http://eotw.comicgenesis.com/

Be gentle

Cactrot · Post by **Cactrot** » Sun Jul 02, 2006 6:33 pm

Nobody has any suggestions or thoughts?

Joel Fagin · Post by **Joel Fagin** » Sun Jul 02, 2006 6:35 pm

You have to allow for people being asleep, at work, busy, rushing to finish their own comic and so on.

Me? I'm getting ready for work.

- Joel Fagin

Cactrot · Post by **Cactrot** » Sun Jul 02, 2006 6:54 pm

All good reasons, but sleep? Who needs sleep!

Cactrot · Post by **Cactrot** » Sun Jul 02, 2006 7:59 pm

No, its not a comic pitch - I was just curious what people thought about my comic.

Heaposheep · Post by **Heaposheep** » Sun Jul 02, 2006 8:32 pm

First, nice lettering and speech bubbles. It's great to see comics that do that in a clear and legible way.

Second, I like the "On the open road to Minnesota". Your style and talent seems to be more suited for comedy, rather than drama.

Speaking of that, it doesn't look like you've really figured out what your mix of drama to gag is. That's ok, but its something you might want to think about.

On the most recent page, when the one guy is getting punched, consider an old-school squash-and-stretch style instead of the photoshop smear effect. In other words, try having the punchee's face actually deform with the punch. It can look really cool, and it's a lot of fun.

The only real complaint I have is that sometimes I have a hard time figuring out what's going on in a page. It takes me a few minutes sometimes. But other than that, it looks good so far.

Cactrot · Post by **Cactrot** » Sun Jul 02, 2006 8:37 pm

Thanks! Your right about the drama to gag mix, I'm not even sure where to take it. I'm kinda figuring out alot of it as I go. Thanks for taking the time to check it out!

Jeffy · Post by **Jeffy** » Mon Jul 03, 2006 5:18 am

Seems a bit rushed and random, maybe try to draw things out a bit more nd have more of an explanation of what is going on and why it's happening, unless you plan on explaining the why afterwards. But, in that case, it still seems rushed and the characters may be a bit too accepting of what's going on, unless that's intentional...