Bugs and fixes

[Samholy]

Hi there !

This topic is there for you to help us finding bugs, mostly from our lack in english writing. We are french here !

Help us out so we can fix errors and mistypings !

[Mr. Caravaggio]

You mean like typos in the comic? Because technically the comic itself is very good.

http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060324.html
should probably be "so many good times at your side"

The site itself is also very fine, good color scheme for the comic.

edt:

http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060503.html

this paragraph could be tweaked:
How shoCking...
finish doesn't need the -ed.
comming can either be coming or cuming, but I've never seen comming.
dont needs a ', don't.

It also just occured to me, I don't know if you can, but the title of this forum could be modified.

Now it's...
To discuss, post feedback or report translation mistake.
But should probably be either.
To discuss, post feedback or report a translation mistake.
or.
To discuss, post feedback or report translation mistakes.

[Samholy]

thanks a lot for your help !

Very appreciated ! Ill make the changes soon enough.

[Samholy]

Okay, its changed... didnt take too long hahaha.

for the topic title, Kata didnt give me the admin title yet, she is so busy lately...

Glad you like our comic yet ! Personnaly,i prefer what is coming next, much more funnier... you will see anyway, if you keep reading !

[Corgan_dane]

"Chocker" should be "choker"

http://dictionary.reference.com/search?r=2&q=choker


Other than that, the comic looks good.

[Samholy]

oh really...then my Petit Robert dictionnary got it wrong hahaha

i will fix this, thanks a lot for your support !

[Ladycheru]

Are you looking for an in-depth correction of the entire comic? I would be willing to do that. The comic is mostly understandable, but there are a few parts that make no sense. A lot of it is just due to cultural barriers. While you have the right meaning, it might not be something we would actually say. But I'm getting on a bit of a tangent...

[Samholy]

well of course, if anyone finds grammar, structures or whatever error that occured on the whole comic so far, we dont mind. Altought, we are discussing with someone right now who might be willing to do so in a near future. but its still waiting for approval.

oh yeah, and I saw you added a link to our site ! thanks a lot ^.^
I will have a talk with kata when ill catch her next time, she's so busy lately...

[Scientivore]

2007-05-08: There shouldn't be an apostrophe in "want".

[Samholy]

oh ! i didnt even noticed ! as a matter of fact, youre the only one so far.

ill go fix this !

thankx !

[RoadRunner]

I think the warning in the title "for adults readers only" isn't right. It should be "for adult readers only" where "adult" is an adjective, or "for adults only" where "adult" is a noun, and "readers" isn't necessary.
By the way, I like the comic, too. Maybe I'm a little pervert...

[Ethanol_Emillee]

oo. i will help you with you grammar. its something i enjoy doing. as i read your comic, i'll give you my advice on editing and stuff. Overall, the comic is good, there are just a few places where its hard to understand and could use some revising.

Chapter 1
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060118.html where it says, "9:00 passed already," nothing really needs changing, its makes sense; just typically, one would leave out the "passed" and just say "9:00 already?!"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060120.html Instead of saying "Why is the deck door opened?" It would be more correct to say "Why is the deck door open?" So your verb tenses agree.
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060206.html It should say "...could you please explain to me..." instead of "could you please explain me". Also "let's move on straight to serious matters," would make more sense if you left the "straight" out so that it said "let's move on to serious matters."
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060215.html It would make more sense to say "you dare reject me?!" instead of "rejecting me?!"

Those are all he corrections i think chapter 1 needs!!

[Ethanol_Emillee]

okay. Chapter 2 edits!!

http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060308.html no big deal. just a typo. "it" is spelled wrong.
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060310.html "i got" should be "i've got"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060313.html the two contractions don't make sense togerher. Without contractions, its say "You will not miss me, will not you?" Change the second "won't" to "will" So it it says "you won't miss me, will you?"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060315.html The "did" should be removed from "Now what did just happened?"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060320.html While the sentence "After a full day of work and this unexpected event, it got me tired after all," makes sense, it would make more sence if it was changed to "After a full day of work and this unexpected event, its gotten me all tired.."
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060327.html "Reserve" is not the right word there. The sentence would sound better if it said "tommorrow will hold some good (hopefully sexy) surprises for me."
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060407.html Delete the "for" in "Cannot resist for a little peek"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060412.html On this page first, "scealed" is spelled wrong. There is not "c" - "sealed," second, there is an infinitive phrase, "trying get it off..." should be "trying to get it off..." and then finally, while "what is all that about?" makes sense, it is more correct to say "what is all this about?" plus, "why puting me in this choker" should say "why did you put me in this choker?"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060414.html just change the second "this" to "that"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060419.html first, change "i got my pride" to "i've got my pride." second, change "you didn't even told me your name" to "you haven't even told me" and also, while not necessary, i would advised deleting "much" in "this much....naked." and changing "trust my own idea" to "my own ideas." Those are not pertinent though.
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060421.html just change "there" to "here"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060426.html change "these" to "this"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060428.html change "i didn't knew a man could complain that " to "i didn't know a man could complain this." a while you dont have too, i would say, change "like if you" to "as if you"

i'm sorry for all the grammar and spelling corrections, i can be a little obsessive sometimes. i just actually really love grammar is all!! i hope im not overloading you though with everything though!

[Ethanol_Emillee]

i'm back again!! i see no one had really been on here in a while but i'll keep posting my edits anyways. here are the corrections for chapter 3:

http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060505.html first, instead of "excellent this coffee" it should say "this coffee is excellent" and second, instead of "talks to me like if we're already married" you could either delete "if" or delete the "like" and add "as" in its place.
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060508.html it would make more sense to say " who likes to pull out" instead of "who plays to pull out"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060510.html theres a wrong verb tense in "you didnt even gave me" gave should be give
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060512.html anothing wrong verb tense in "she didnt even listened" listened should be listen
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060517.html verb tense in "i didnt worked hard" worked should be work
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060519.html it would make more sense to say "so many things to say" instead of "so much"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060522.html first "neither your name" should be "not even your name" second, "why is it sticked" should be "why is it stuck" and "that" should be changed into "this" and third, "wich" is spelled wrong, it is spelled "which"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060524.html "wich" is spelled wrong again, same correct spelling as above and "a little mad for this" would sound better as "a little mad about this"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060531.html it would make more sense to say "as if i was" instead of "like if i was"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060605.html "what does she wants" should be "what does she want"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060616.html deleted "of" in "i cant abuse of the situation"
http://elle.comicgenesis.com/d/20060621.html it would sound better to say "very pleasant" instead of "so much pleasant"

okay, thats all that i found in chapter 3!!