Severed Ties ------->The current arc

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 6:57 am

Pravus wrote:Thanks....I still don't think in the original he was flirting, but I think you did a good job

It depends on the viewer. That smile in panel was pretty creepy though. I toned it down a bit. And redrawing the hand obscures his smile a bit in panel 4.

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 6:58 am

Yeahduff · Post by **Yeahduff** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 7:40 am

Pravus wrote:I still don't think in the original he was flirting...

Oooooooooooooooooooooooooh man.....

The new expressions are better. Much more subtle. I thought he was gonna jump up and pounce on the poor guy on the pencils. His interest is still clear but it's within reason.

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 7:48 am

Thanks. And redrawing that crappy hand into a less crappy hand obscures the smile a bit too.

On a different subject, it has now been revealed where this comic takes place. Woo hoo.

Col · Post by **Col** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 8:22 am

I like it. Ted's face is great in the first panel.

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 8:23 am

That's actually one of my favorite panels. I may make it my avatar at some point.

Paul Escobar · Post by **Paul Escobar** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 10:05 am

CG's up and running again. And the page turned out real nice. I agree with yeahduff; the expressions are much better now. The hand looks fine too. Good job.

theSuburbanLetdown wrote:I didn't actually spend much time inking it. I used a pitt marker for most of the figures. I need to stop caring and get faster. I'm trying to adopt the mindset of the whole over the part. It's not like Jeff Smith blew us away on every page of Bone.

I actually can't tell much difference regarding the inking. Perhaps it's more obvious when looking at the original art or a print version rather than 600x900 px gifs.

Focusing on the totality of the work rather than individual frames is a good idea. It's easy - tempting really - to get lost in details that don't really make any difference to the reading experience.

For the same reason, I'm seriously considering doing digital "inking" for my work-in-slow-progress. My tablet pen inking looks far sketchier than my brush inking, but brush inking takes me so damn long. So yeah.

Pravus · Post by **Pravus** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 12:42 pm

theSuburbanLetdown wrote:
On a different subject, it has now been revealed where this comic takes place. Woo hoo.

Is it like what they did with the Simpsons, Family Guy, or did you use an actual place?

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 1:27 pm

It's based on an actual place, but I won't outright name it because it's more fun this way. That and I also changed it around a lot. But I will say Rosander University is in the Midwest.

Pravus · Post by **Pravus** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 1:55 pm

Hmmm...Illinois, Wisconsin, or Ohio I think...

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 1:56 pm

Don't forget Indiana. Afterall, there is more than corn in Indiana.

(dunno who would get this joke...)

Pravus · Post by **Pravus** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 4:13 pm

Ummm....NASCAR?

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Wed Jan 30, 2008 5:39 pm

Look at what the crow in the upper right-hand corner is saying:

http://www.indianabeach.com/

I used to see these commercials all the time.

Also, keep in mind we don't know where Evan lives, so we don't know what direction they're going in.

Yeahduff · Post by **Yeahduff** » Thu Jan 31, 2008 8:08 am

How mysterious.....

zzzzzz

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Thu Jan 31, 2008 8:12 am

Obviously you do care, or you wouldn't have said anything. Or are you really just an asshole?

Col · Post by **Col** » Thu Jan 31, 2008 8:20 am

theSuburbanLetdown wrote:Look at what the crow in the upper right-hand corner is saying:

http://www.indianabeach.com/

I used to see these commercials all the time.

I had a feeling it was that.

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Thu Jan 31, 2008 8:21 am

I've never been there, actually.

Col · Post by **Col** » Thu Jan 31, 2008 8:23 am

Nor I, but I know the commercials you're talking about.

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Thu Jan 31, 2008 8:25 am

I my sister used to sing it, but change the words to, "There's no more corn, in Indiana....."

Yeahduff · Post by **Yeahduff** » Thu Jan 31, 2008 9:06 am

I know the setting. Obviously I'm just an asshole.

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