Kureji Ippatsu
This comic is a story about a character named Matt who took Ninjustsu and has a prophecy about him. It's hard to write a description for it because my mind always focuses on the story aspect... and makes it sound alot more fantasy like... In actuality, it's a pretty light hearted comedy. I don't think there is anything that would scare away viewers... There is about 30 strips... Just try out the first few strips at least before you judge it, please? You might like it...
small bump for new strip... I'm only bumping this once... *wonders how many people checked it out... (the weblogs for it hasn't been updating for some odd reason so he can't check)*
Okay, I feel I need to be honest here. Your comic has promise. In fact Sept.13 and after is pretty darn good. It's just that everything before it was pretty generic with nothing to bring it out. Your art work is adorable, but the storyline was rather flat, granted you don't need to be completly original for a comic to become popular - but it does need characters and jokes to raise it above the bar of "average".
I suggest thaking another look at your first few comics. Spice them up.
Your later comics are really good , but most will get bored before even getting to them- I'd really like to see this take off. Oh yes and add some sound effects- even really stupid sound effects add to a comic - especially when the Mom shoots the ski-mask guy - that realy needed a sound effect.
Oh yes and Props for being from the south! We need more cartoonists down here (from north Louisiana)!
Keep it up man - no one can stop you but you!
Jou: No... But wait in a few days this cheese will have magic powers- Unless I KILLZ it!!! (stabbs cheese with fork)
Tolkien: Abusing dariy products isn't going to get us anywhere.. we need a plan...
---Old script for the RPG Misfits
To be honest, the beginning seems to be too fast-paced for a story comic, especially for an anime-style story comic. In the first couple comics, I felt as if I was being pummeled with action, and then it was over so fast that I didn't even care that there was any.
As I moved in, the timing on the jokes and action seemed to get better. We'll chalk that up to you getting the hang of it as you went along. My advice would be to go back and redo some of the earlier comics -slow the pace down and maybe redo some of the jokes- so that more people will be able to get to the later ones.
As said above, the story itself doesn't seem too original. You should probably offer something that will keep anime buffs from turning their noses in a "seen it" gesture. Good jokes will do that, but, again, that means you need to go back and redo the first couple comics so they really catch a reader's attention.
The art's pretty good, though all artists could use some improvement. The lines you use on your arm muscles seem a little faked, but other than that, it's a pretty solid anime style. Careful with your backgrounds. Some of the dark ones can get a little busy.
And, finally, did I detect a lapse? A 10-month lapse, nonetheless...? Heh. Hope you have a buffer. I might just mark this one on my "frequent read" list. Overall, I found your comic refreshingly funny. Just polish up the first part a little bit.
Heh. "What the hell is Parcheesi?!" Classic bad guy. ^_^
This is going in my notebook titled "Things I Didn't Know about Surface Dwellers."
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