And if anyone has any suggestions for how to set up the table on the main page with the tagboard and calendar better, I'd welcome them ^^; Besides that, I'm pretty happy with the layout.
Mmkay. *reads archives* I like it... but... the... *progression* of the story seems a bit... hard to follow at times. As if I'm looking at, in the frames, moments of the characters lives that dont' *quite* happen right after each other; it's as if there are a few frames missing in the action of each page...
Not that that stopped me -- I am a member of one of what is probably your largest reader demographic -- young males.
"If you hear a voice inside you saying "you are not an artist," then by all means make art... and that voice shall be silenced"
-Adapted from Van Gogh
+:
Story could be good, but as said, it could go slower. The talks need a little more nuance, you know? You descrive the characters a bit in your rants, that's the kind of thing that could be in ther actual comic.
-:
Drawings are a little strange. For a comic with so much bare skin it'd probably be best to practice anatomy as much as possible. I realize there's a japanese influence, so you probably don't want to do the eyes too realistically, but still, those are some big peepers.
Your page layout+ composition is super and you have done a steller job on the backgrounds. (however I'm not so fond of Annabelle's face- her eyes might be a bit too* big, they look kind of "streched" to me- the rest of your characters look fine.)
Something else I thought was good was the use of detail in your comic- everything is so lovingly rendered! you never seem to cut corners.
The colored "covers" are a nice touch
Just fix up a few proportion issues and you will be ready to rock!
Mr. Caravaggio, I know what you mean about the dialogue. I've never been very good at it and I always seem to want to write it so that it explains everything. I'm trying to work on that though.
mimo, thanks so much for the compliment on the details
Yeah, I kinda thought the eyes would come up here... a couple of people already have told me her eyes are too big and square. I refuse to change them though, I love her the way she is <3 I just hope it doesn't bug people too much because a lot of the other characters that haven't shown up yet have similar eyes ^^;
Actually the eyes are not unusual for some styles of manga. I've seen larger ones in "professional" works. I myself have never really liked huge eyes though.
