Dominic wrote:I find the text a little difficult to read. Or is that just my old eyes?
No...it's not your eyes. I can hardly read it either (but I got too lazy to change it after...heh. Forgive me) I'll try make it bigger on my next page, but most of my speech bubbles (I'm still trying to figure out how to draw the speech bubbles...they're so hard!) are quite small. I view on a 800x600 btw.
On a side note, I only realised 30 minutes ago that the reason everything looks more muddled than I had thought was because the comic colour is a bit dark. I didn't notice the problem because I have my comp on a brighter setting so everything is really white. I've fixed the problem hopefully now- I set the brightness of each page up by around 15 units. Now it should look a bit better. Oops
~Prapim
~ They all cheat at checkers. They make me do pushups in drag. ~
<a href="http://ethancerin.keenspace.com">Private School Boys. Not as suggestive as it sounds.</a>
heya... thats an interesting comic u got there... though i don't really dig boy/boy relationships.
its good that you put in so much effort... unlike me... lol. i usually spend about 15 mins to 30mins drawing and 30 mins to colour.
your style is pretty and there's lotsa potential. gosh i need to work harder... way harder, since i only started drawing months ago.
btw, are you really from singapore because erm, i'm from there too!
Curses; everyone's already said what needs to be said critique-wise. At least it means you've got the advice of people who know what they're talking about.
It's a pretty interesting story (a change from "saving/destroying the world", or something) and you've got a pretty good set of characters. I guess I'd recommend a bigger font size, as I find my (old!) self squinting a lot. Also, for some reason, your sister's site doesn't appear to be working.
Man. I'm sorry you haven't had such good experiences with your art teachers, but they're bound to get better ;; To that one woman's credit, I myself am impressed with your typing skills... but that's because my Singaporean roommate has shown me how all her friends type. It's inhuman!
Ah ha...not everybody in Singapore has an inhuman way of typing (or speaking, for that matter). But I'm not actually Singaporean- I'm Thai living here. Please don't ask me about palm beaches though. I haven't lived there for nearly a decade.
I put in lots of effort because I am bad, simply
*Doesn't know what Vampire Game is...hides in a dark corner* I will look for it later!
Oh yes...Bass Master Fei, thanks for the compliment of 'interesting storyline'. It's actually probably the most bland, unoriginal storyline I have ever come up with but I am rubbish with fantasy or murder (I've tried and failed). But...
~Prapim
~ They all cheat at checkers. They make me do pushups in drag. ~
<a href="http://ethancerin.keenspace.com">Private School Boys. Not as suggestive as it sounds.</a>
Your art style is...interesting. Normally I don't criticize art, because I'm not exactly Rembrandt myself, but the elongated necks and exaggerated anime style kinda turn me off. But if it works for you, great. It certainly isn't poorly drawn.
Also, the pictures are really bright and washed-out, at least for me. Consider upping the contrast.
prapim wrote:Ah ha...not everybody in Singapore has an inhuman way of typing (or speaking, for that matter). But I'm not actually Singaporean- I'm Thai living here. Please don't ask me about palm beaches though. I haven't lived there for nearly a decade.
Right, then. I have a biased source of information >.>. Anyway, about the storyline... have you read the typical BL manga plotline? Give yourself a little credit :P.
