Jager Rising, looking for review and CC

[Jinoku]

Ok, I've been at this comic for awhile now,100+ pages, wonder if you'll get that far. :p Theres some obvious problems I started with, I.E. story, text, speech bubbles in the beginning, these are things that have been changed or are being addressed now. Like I said i've been at this for awhile, like years lol so try to get in to the more recent stuff before calling me on things if you can.

The site: http://jinoku.comicgen.com/

A short summary. Fight Ring, an underground activity that involves gambling, combat, and just social gatherings, Fight Ring is unique in the fact that its not so much a blood sport or really illegal activity but strangely controlled to an extent that nothing ever gets extreme. Mostly teens to young adults take part and it can be considered more of a social club than a illegal organzation.

Jager High, a school that actually recruits students from Fight Rings! ( theres a reason behind this) This is where our story begins after our main character gets transfered there.

There lots of shonen jump influence here, and i'm working on bringing to story up to speed in terms of depth. Theres some profane language but thats about it as far as warnings go.
Anyway I want some opinions and CC.

Also if anybody knows a good way to get a newsbox without having to manual update the html everytime please inform me of that too.

Thank you all very much!

Once again the site is: http://jinoku.comicgen.com/

[Redtech]

Woo...sexy in a violent way.
Personally I don't feel that there's much in the way of storyline flaws that couldn't really be resolved as "plot device" such as how you actually rate someone's power level or how the best fighters (the lead three) have their skills or what people do in in their spare time and personal lives etc etc, it's no biggie, I think you're doing fine just making a story about a tourney and a girl who kicks ass. Logic need not apply too strongly! "And where'd that sword come from?"

I do seriously like your art style and I don't see anything to really gripe about. It's very refined and you're very capable of fight scenes, I'm not really sure if I prefer simple linework or greyscale shading, it feels to more more like it's averaging out between your two contrasts as I don't feel that shades add too much to your work, although the improved linework benefits.

As for the story, I feel it's functional, I warn against trying to take it too seriously! If I have a criticism is that you do have scope to see more into the lives of the other characters and I know that Kaza is the lead, but making her the "unbeatable" character is a a tad cliche' I just don't feel she's in any sort of danger even if she is powerful both physically and charismatically.

I think I need to crack some skulls now!

[Jinoku]

Thank you so much for the comment and critique Redtech! Its a great morale booster to hear I got somethings going well lol. I'm definitely going to take your suggestions. The plan for this current chapter is to try to give a better idea of the strength of the fighters and to give Kaza some goals to work towards. Like you said I don't want the reader to never feel shes in danger.There is a level of fighter that I haven't introduced yet that will give you a better since of what they're eventually going to be up against and have to reach.

Once again thanks and if you want to do a link exchange or exchange guest pages/art just let me know.