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Also in need of genral critique.
Posted: Fri Apr 16, 2004 9:55 am
by MomoChan
As a foot note, I draw the pencil and Feru-Chan inks/adds tones. If you know your problem is with the tones or the tnk or the underlaying picture- please be specific, it helps us more when we know hwo has to work on what.
In the event that the link dosen't work properly,
http://magicalartistpencil.keenspace.com/
As a genral rule I'm imrpoving it as well as I can- but- if there anythign that looks good now, or that should be fixed ASAP...
thanks.
Posted: Fri Apr 16, 2004 10:09 am
by Mercury Hat
I gave up trying to read it around the January 8 comic because there is way too much filler in your archives. It has no purpose in the archives, get rid of it.
Posted: Fri Apr 16, 2004 1:31 pm
by Ruxen
There is a lot of filler material in your archives, many of them back to back, try saving some for later days when you can't draw. For the comic itself I find it funny, but it doesn't seem to be heading in any general direction. I just see it as a bunch of stuff happening. Your art is quite good, and I like how you used some interesting page layouts they are both function and easy to follow most of the time. I had some trouble following the flow of your comic on the first page since everything seemed to be on one page with the lack of direction adding to confusion, but I'm glad the rest of the comic was well structured. Your text is alright but sometimes it gets really tiny and I find it hard to pick up what it says.
Posted: Sat Apr 17, 2004 1:31 pm
by McDuffies
Fillers have no place in archives.Why do you have them anyway? Nobody forces you to update. Make a gallery for them.
Site kills me with 800x600 resolution - check your stats and you'll see that there's still significant number of people still using this res.
Your inking is very nice. Specially crossed with rasters. But don't overdo with raster schemes, they're like colour schemes, if you use many various pastel colours on single page, you'll get too shiny page. Same with rasters, here:
http://magicalartistpencil.keenspace.co ... 40406.html
you use different raster for every background, you're just overdoing it.
Your characters have too small hips. Specially female, females generally have hips wider than shoulders.
Posted: Sat Apr 17, 2004 4:27 pm
by Zhan_Dvega
Firstly, put the comic on the left side and the menu on the right, I HATE having to scroll over to the side to read every page.
Secondly, you're not supposed to put spaces in Japanese.
And, umm... that's all I've got for now...
Posted: Sat Apr 17, 2004 9:01 pm
by Thingschange
Eye candy is nice, but why are you starting with filler?
Damnit, I can't sit here and scroll through this much filler. I'm giving up. Maybe if all the filler were cute half-naked catboys I could handle it, but the sake days are just reminding me why there are no sake cocktails.
Get rid of the filler from your archives. Just do it, okay?
Posted: Sun Apr 18, 2004 11:51 am
by The Chill Clan
While I personaly like the filler art, I think it's gotten to the point where you have way to much in your archives. It deserves it's own GALLERY or something (*looks to the left of the site*). I like the story (if it can be called that), what you really need is to work on your site layout. *slams head on desk* I knew I forgot to do something today, umm gotta go, ja.
O.o
Posted: Sun Apr 18, 2004 5:33 pm
by MomoChan
Eee- *takes a bow* ookay- I'll try to shuffle the filler off and otu of the way- we're got a half donw new first page in the works that'll get rid og the feruchan happy face of death thing-
hmm,. more half naked cat boys as far filler goes- and as far as filler goes- don't- so- therefor- half naked cat boys are a no?
teasing. their too fun to draw..
Stroy- laack of? AWW CRAP!! I've been caught! Sorta- stuff gonna happen- but, if you need a deep- meaningufl story to keep you engrossed- sorry.
soem of my horrid random stuff will start to make sense later- or, atleast- that's the plan. Thank you for takeign the time to read our comic!
(we prmise the typos will improve)