* World War II Comic * New Page, New Subject Line...

Twconstantine · Post by **Twconstantine** » Fri May 18, 2007 9:20 am

I am working on a World War 2 comic. I would like some advice before I seal the deal in ink! Anyway, any help would be great!

Geekblather · Post by **Geekblather** » Fri May 18, 2007 10:25 am

What kind of help are you looking for? Because frankly, what you have now is Awesome with a capital Awesome.

Nomadic Phoenix · Post by **Nomadic Phoenix** » Fri May 18, 2007 1:38 pm

*Unleashes several thousand gallons of drool*

What are you asking for? I mean, this is perfection on a stick, my friend! Honestly, I can't see how it'd get any better...oh wait, I do. MAKE THE COMIC!

Don't hesitate; don't think. Just do it.

McBean · Post by **McBean** » Fri May 18, 2007 2:09 pm

maybe tighten up the panels, make the font a little larger...perhaps add a gorilla comic relief character. other than that, you're pretty much golden.

Twconstantine · Post by **Twconstantine** » Sat May 19, 2007 9:57 am

Thanks for the kind words gang! I appreciate it. Here is the next page. It's only going to be about 15 pages total.

Thanks for lookin!

Warofwinds · Post by **Warofwinds** » Sat May 19, 2007 9:31 pm

I love it all except for that last word balloon there. The spacing is kind of awkward. Nice work! I'd love to see this colored.

Twconstantine · Post by **Twconstantine** » Tue May 22, 2007 8:42 pm

Here is page 5 for those who are keeping up! I started inking page 1 today, so I'll have the finished pages up here soon!

TigerEye · Post by **TigerEye** » Wed May 23, 2007 6:29 am

These are looking wonderful! I really like your character designs.

Reinder · Post by **Reinder** » Wed May 23, 2007 7:44 am

"Stoppen Sie Sie"...

You may want to have someone look at the German dialogue in your comic. There's very little of it now, but that line stood out to me as dodgy.

My own German, unfortunately, is not good enough to confirm this, though.

Magpye · Post by **Magpye** » Wed May 23, 2007 8:12 am

Sounds like a Babelfish special to me... it throws up some really dodgy grammar. Unfortunately it's been a good twelve years since I've had to haul any German from the depths of my brain, so I'm just here as a useless comentator.

Twconstantine · Post by **Twconstantine** » Wed May 23, 2007 4:16 pm

Here is page one in color. I admit, color is not my strong suit. If you think you can do better, please, show me how it's done!

Twconstantine · Post by **Twconstantine** » Thu May 24, 2007 1:33 pm

Here is page two colored. I hope you guys like it!

Magpye · Post by **Magpye** » Thu May 24, 2007 2:25 pm

Your colour is actually pretty good. Much better than I can manage.

Lei · Post by **Lei** » Thu May 24, 2007 4:59 pm

... That looks professional quality. O_O

I might make the lawn a little less neat though, in the bottom panel of the first page. It looks like the landscaping crew just finished up fertilizing. Maybe add some craters from shells? A bit of smouldering rubble?

Twconstantine · Post by **Twconstantine** » Tue May 29, 2007 9:46 am

Thanks for the tip...I've redone the grass, as well as desaturated the color a bit. Also, here is page 3 colored. Let me know what you all think!

Robin Pierce · Post by **Robin Pierce** » Tue May 29, 2007 11:52 am

cool pages - but yeah that german is definitely shifty.

it should be "Halte sie an." if anything. Stoppen Sie sie is just literal (and horrid) translation. If he's the commander giving orders he wouldn't be refering to his soldiers formaly.

Halte sie an translates to "stop them" and is probably the better way to go.

Twconstantine · Post by **Twconstantine** » Tue May 29, 2007 2:22 pm

Great! Thanks! I'll change it when I do the inking! I just typed it into BableFish and waited for someone to correct it! I appreciate it!

VIIStar · Post by **VIIStar** » Tue May 29, 2007 2:24 pm

It's really quite good...!
my only thought is that between sketching and photoshop coloring, you lose a lot of energy. your sketches have quite a bit of nice movement and expression, nearly all of which is lost in the thick cartoon lines in the finished digital image.
have you experimented with coloring over a finished/edited sketch instead of overlaying the lines digitally?

Twconstantine · Post by **Twconstantine** » Tue May 29, 2007 3:39 pm

That's an interesting question. I didn't think that my sketches were good enough to just color on. They are kinda sloppy! How would I go about doing that?

VIIStar · Post by **VIIStar** » Wed May 30, 2007 8:10 am

That's an interesting question. I didn't think that my sketches were good enough to just color on. They are kinda sloppy! How would I go about doing that?

well, you'd need to keep some of the mess, so if you're going for a straight cel shaded cartoon-look *which i assume* there needs to be a balance.
try bringing up the contrast and brightness from your sketches and working and cleaning up from that.
if that won't work and you can't get the lines clean enough for the look you want and you still need to overlay digitally, then try more varied line, *i don't think i explained that right* a line that is thicker at the start and thins out or breaks, instead of one that stays the same width. that might help keep it from flattening out (heavier, darker lines visually fall behind thinner, lighter lines, creating depth) and retain some of the motion and keep the clean look.

http://www.viistar.com/images/2d/manga/ ... eux6_0.jpg

probably isn't a great example for what you want, but it shows the varied lines i was talking about. for me, i transfer from a sketch to inking paper with cotton drafting paper, and then scan. i feel more in control of the lines working by hand (seeing that i lack a tablet)

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