It's been a while since I last asked for opinions on my comic, and I think I've improved since then (but that's just my opinion).
So - website, art, story line, style, coloring, plans for world domination, and so on. Anything is up for critique. I'll try to keep a thick skin and open mind.
*stands comic in front of the firing squad*
Link is in my signature.
Thanks!
Critique Demonocity, Please!
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Rosediamond
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First the good! ^^
You have very unique character designs! And the outfits they wear are very cool, too, though sometimes a little hard to maneuver in (that wedding outfit
) And I love your use of colors, especially the range of skin tones and hair colors! Very nice. ^^
Now . . .
First, I've got to tell you that when you get to the links page, the navigation bar is dead, so you may want to fix that up.
As for the actual comic . . . I can follow it. Sort of. But things are happening so hard and fast I occasionally need to read over pages more than once to get the full effect of it. The layout is confusing at times. Speech bubbles are maneuvered strangely in some places, either crowded together or too far apart, and I have to work to figure out who's talking when and how the conversation connects (I have this problem, too.
).
Last, character anatomy is an issue. Finding the balance of anatomy can be difficult; it's just something that needs to be studied and worked at (Victoria's Secret catalogues are great for it).
Okay, peanut gallery out . . . *throws one last peanut and runs*
You have very unique character designs! And the outfits they wear are very cool, too, though sometimes a little hard to maneuver in (that wedding outfit
) And I love your use of colors, especially the range of skin tones and hair colors! Very nice. ^^Now . . .
First, I've got to tell you that when you get to the links page, the navigation bar is dead, so you may want to fix that up.
As for the actual comic . . . I can follow it. Sort of. But things are happening so hard and fast I occasionally need to read over pages more than once to get the full effect of it. The layout is confusing at times. Speech bubbles are maneuvered strangely in some places, either crowded together or too far apart, and I have to work to figure out who's talking when and how the conversation connects (I have this problem, too.
).Last, character anatomy is an issue. Finding the balance of anatomy can be difficult; it's just something that needs to be studied and worked at (Victoria's Secret catalogues are great for it).
Okay, peanut gallery out . . . *throws one last peanut and runs*
"Of precious life shall come the one to reunite the thorns and rose."
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Thanks for the comments 
I'm glad you liked the character designs - that was the easy part for me
The bridal costume is supposed to be almost painful to walk in - cultural reasons in the elf society.
I was alittle worried about the pacing. I guess I'm trying to fit too much into each week. I'll try and tone the action/pacing back a bit for that.
Speach bubbles have been a bit of an issue for me. But I think if I can fix the pacing, I'll be able to fit the bubbles a bit better.
Anatomy - which specifically? Length of limbs, proportions of hips to bust etc? Hands and feet are something relatively new to me (hence the backward foot in this past comic)
I'm glad you liked the character designs - that was the easy part for me
The bridal costume is supposed to be almost painful to walk in - cultural reasons in the elf society.I was alittle worried about the pacing. I guess I'm trying to fit too much into each week. I'll try and tone the action/pacing back a bit for that.
Speach bubbles have been a bit of an issue for me. But I think if I can fix the pacing, I'll be able to fit the bubbles a bit better.
Anatomy - which specifically? Length of limbs, proportions of hips to bust etc? Hands and feet are something relatively new to me (hence the backward foot in this past comic)
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Jollyrodgers4
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Rosediamond
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*points up* What he said! I think if you keep improving at the pace you are, you should have it all down in no time. ^^[/b]Jollyrodgers4 wrote:Couldn't hurt to brush up on all of it. I looked at your older work and you have really improved in a short amount of time!Anatomy - which specifically?
"Of precious life shall come the one to reunite the thorns and rose."
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Thank you both for the critiques! I'm slowing the pacing down in Saturday's comic. I'm hoping I'll be able to update more than once a week if I slow the pacing down a bit.
I'm going to continue practicing the anatomy in different poses. Which is what I think throws me off is the different angles and how it changes shapes. Any suggestions for places to look to remedy this?
Please, keep the critiques coming!
I'm going to continue practicing the anatomy in different poses. Which is what I think throws me off is the different angles and how it changes shapes. Any suggestions for places to look to remedy this?
Please, keep the critiques coming!
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Taiwanimation
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On the topic of the speech bubbles, you might want to try the following...
1. make the text smaller... or edit the dialogue so its not as wordy.
2. have bubbles vertical ovals instead of horizontal
3. when there is narration, such as on the july 8th page, use rectangles or some other shape. the use of ovals makes it seem like the dialogue is coming from within the panel.
1. make the text smaller... or edit the dialogue so its not as wordy.
2. have bubbles vertical ovals instead of horizontal
3. when there is narration, such as on the july 8th page, use rectangles or some other shape. the use of ovals makes it seem like the dialogue is coming from within the panel.
