How good are your eyes?

Chibiartstudios · Post by **Chibiartstudios** » Wed Nov 30, 2005 6:54 pm

I see it. I had to look again and again and again though. If I hadn't been told that there was something there I'd of missed it completely. Make it just a tad more obvious.

Suika · Post by **Suika** » Thu Dec 01, 2005 1:16 am

I missed it completely the first time as well. It also took me several tries to actually find it. Definately bring up the contrast or try to make it a little more obvious.

Strangely, this is starting to remind me of "Where's Waldo"... ^^

Yeahduff · Post by **Yeahduff** » Thu Dec 01, 2005 2:05 am

Saw them both pretty quickly, but only because I was told to look for something.

The hidden quality is OK in the second panel but should definitely not be subtle in the last. We should KNOW at that point. Bigger reflection.

Hale · Post by **Hale** » Thu Dec 01, 2005 2:25 am

yeahduff wrote:Saw them both pretty quickly, but only because I was told to look for something.

The hidden quality is OK in the second panel but should definitely not be subtle in the last. We should KNOW at that point. Bigger reflection.

That's definately where I messed up, but not something I can fix easily at this point. Sorry. This really helped to allow me to better understand how comic-readers eyes work. I'm just now working on the strip following this one, so I'll post it up as soon as I'm done.

Still... I think I'm enjoying this foul up more than I should. "IT" is going to end up sneaking up on the reader as well as Steve, that is, if the reader doesn't see it in this strip... 8)

Hale · Post by **Hale** » Thu Dec 01, 2005 3:14 am

Here you go! Hope this clears things up.

Sput · Post by **Sput** » Thu Dec 01, 2005 4:00 pm

whatever that alien/ninja dude is, i would so hit that.

edit: to be a lil helpful; no it's not clear at all, ish. cuz i had to look back at your original piece to see the similarities, but now that i look the ninja/alien dude is waaay neat. the colouring, effects, and linework is all ver professional, and i likey a lot. the expression on his face? cwute. <3!

Oualawouzou · Post by **Oualawouzou** » Thu Dec 01, 2005 4:47 pm

RA wrote:whatever that alien/ninja dude is, i would so hit that.

I think the other guy is just about to hit him too.

Hale · Post by **Hale** » Thu Dec 01, 2005 6:40 pm

RA wrote:whatever that alien/ninja dude is, i would so hit that.

edit: to be a lil helpful; no it's not clear at all, ish. cuz i had to look back at your original piece to see the similarities, but now that i look the ninja/alien dude is waaay neat. the colouring, effects, and linework is all ver professional, and i likey a lot. the expression on his face? cwute. <3!

Haha, his name is Kalki. He's neither a ninja nor an alien. He's an obsolete war machine (tagged for termination), a mute, rogue robot that acts like a hyper monkey, causing mischief. He has an untold vendetta against Steve that I'm going to reveal later, but right now, they're just going to break out into meaningless, sporadic and humorous fights.

Thanks for the art comments; I'm always looking for ways to improve. Oh and sorry (everyone) about not conveying the whole situation better. That's obviously something I need to look into improving on.

Yeahduff · Post by **Yeahduff** » Fri Dec 02, 2005 1:50 am

I'd have RA's boyfriend hold up the lighter still. Not sure if that'd clear things up, but it'd be nice for continuity.

Most of us are still doing the trial and error thing, so worry not. You're doing pretty good thus far.

IVstudios · Post by **IVstudios** » Fri Dec 02, 2005 6:25 am

Also, on a little side note, I noticed your banner and the image both link to
http://www.tofustyle.com, but when I go there, all I see is a blank white page.

Hale · Post by **Hale** » Fri Dec 02, 2005 1:08 pm

ivstudios wrote:Also, on a little side note, I noticed your banner and the image both link to
http://www.tofustyle.com, but when I go there, all I see is a blank white page.

Weird. It may be something w/ your browser or connection. If it IS my DNS, try http://tofustyle.comicgenesis.com

hrm, my pal just told me he's having issues with "www.tofustyle.com" on apple safari. So if you're on a mac, I'm sorry, there isn't much I can really do. other than supplying the true domain above ^

ShineDog · Post by **ShineDog** » Sat Dec 03, 2005 6:32 pm

bear in mind that everyones monitors are set up differently. this is why something that looks on one screen great can look wishy washy on another.

etc.

general rule of thumb, with dark things like that, as i see it, is if you have details like that in the background hidden in darkness, and you want them to be spotted, have some light catching them, do them glowing, it might give the game away, but at first glance at that page, most folks are gonna go "huh?" and on some monitors (im running 2 and on my secondary monitor i can barely see it with full brightness) its gonna be a nightmare.

Noise Monkey · Post by **Noise Monkey** » Tue Dec 06, 2005 8:05 am

I saw it, but like was mentioned before, a better placement of the reflection might've helped. However, I think it's probably just as cool that its there but you don't (definitely) really know it until the next page. Having it there is more important than it being obvious. Makes the next page more of a surprise. Plus, people can go back and look at the first page you posted and get that "OHH!" feeling when they realize it was all right there.

Doukasou · Post by **Doukasou** » Tue Dec 06, 2005 5:01 pm

If you hadn't underlined the title, I would have been totally oblivious >.<

Wolf · Post by **Wolf** » Tue Dec 06, 2005 10:02 pm

i laugh at you all. It wasnt that hard to find. lol.

Deadbeats · Post by **Deadbeats** » Sun Dec 11, 2005 1:44 am

It was not too hard to find, but a casual reader most likely would not just catch it in either panel. First time, its okay to let it slip, but when he notices it, it should be more obvious to us as well. By the way, the banner link worked just fine for me. /shrug

Swiftbow · Post by **Swiftbow** » Mon Dec 12, 2005 12:34 pm

Man... I really need to replace my monitor. Even with maximum brightness, I can't see ANYTHING in the second panel until I copy it into photoshop and crank up the brightness there. Plus I'm seeing a screen flicker as I'm typing... grumble.