This strip needs SERIOUS work
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WESLEYWILLIS
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You should've stuck it out with Tyrsica. At least that had a degree of potential to go somewhere. <P>This strip lacks an incredibly important element which I think you may have been going for: Comedy. I read the strips and I find the jokes, stare at the screen for several seconds, trying desparately to see even the slightest shred of comedy. Comedy is supposed to skew something in real life and evoke laughter and pleasure. Hopefully both.<P>This does neither. I understand the jokes because I'm quite familiar with the topics you are mocking, yet I cannot for a moment bring myself to even crack a smile while reading the words that pour from your pathetic, uninteresting characters. These characters, if one can even call them that, simply act pathetic in a way that completely bypasses anything resembling humor. They lack wit to a painful degree, and simply show that they are unable to do anything but think about videogames and anime and such. This could have been funny, if you had taken it over the edge a bit, showing how their reliance on their "hobby" completely prevents them from being human beings. Unfortunately, this was not the case. They merely think about videogames and talk about them in a very uninteresting manner.<P>True, they don't JUST talk about videogames, but the other scenarios they are placed in are simply unrewarding and uninteresting.<P>Anyway, the thought crossed my mind that perhaps this comic strip was not used for making fun of a few pathetic fool's reliance on their "hobby," instead having some sort of social/political/philosophical/etc. commentary. However, after reading a few of the strips it is painfully obvious that either you are ininterested in doing this, or you simply lack the literary ability and/or intelligence to render your medium with any profound elements.<P>Again, you truly should have stuck with Animatical's Tyrsica. I'll admit that the dialogue you had written up to the point when you retired was painfully unrealistic and boring, but at least that was a project that might have gone somewhere and developed had you stayed with it. Maybe you would have improved as a writer up until the point where the dialogue would have been interesting, but that was not the case.<P>In summary, you have absolutely no grasp on the notion of humor at all. How these mindless drones can sit and humor your underdeveloped comic is far beyond me. It truly says something about society. That they have expectations so low that they will laugh at somebody simply because of their intention to be funny(see: Rush Hour 2).<P>Have a nice day!<P> <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/smile.gif">
As you can obviously see, the fellow who wrote this creed of anti-paradigm is so obviously upset about sega going to a 3rd party that he has to take his fustrations out on this little web comic.<P>I think that fellow needs a nap because he his mighty grumpy and maybe the other 3 people that read aaron's comic should pitch in and maybe send this fellow a new system.<P>Maybe this guy would like a copy of Monopoly on Microsofts new home computer...i mean system.<P>Maybe he needs to pull the stick out of his rectum and to come to a realization of what this site really is. A web page hosting a web comic maintained and created by a college student in a small little podunct town called Harriman.<P>Or maybe the humor left skid marks on his forehead. I'll leave that decision up to you, the other 3 people that come to this web page.